Really well done Jon, I like it very much, you have such a great way of working a composition and I love your ideas
The overall mix and instrument choices, everything sonically fits really well and is well balanced.
After listening to it many times, just a few observations that struck me (everybody will here things differently, so take this with a piece of salt haha!
IntroI felt that it needed a few bars of maybe solo piano or another instrument to lead into the piece as it stands at the moment.
0:47very nice, loved it!
1:08 and 4:30 ishI really felt that the violin (if it is a violin) could be a little more expressive. I like how you have set it back in the mix, but I feel it's a little too static.
4:36Not too sure of the harmony of instrument parts, does it need the 'c' passing note on the piano, also just before that a bell like tone sounds a little awkward - but it's probably just me and all is fine!
4:48The transition from the 4/4 section back into the 6/8 passage, I noticed that there is a tambourine being used, it would be interesting if the tambourine has a final shake with a decrescendo transitioning into the 6/8 part - just an idea etc
The first time the 6/8 transitions into the 4/4 section I had to listen to it a lot! I was in the groove of 6/8 and feeling that, then the bass drum enters (I think on the 5th quaver of that transitioning 6/8 bar) and it really through my train of thought. After about 5 times I got used to it and all was good! haha
I think the timing is a little too loose for my liking, just maybe tighten up a little, but not to the extent of it feeling rigid?
Anyway - I love you work, and I loved this track, so very well done again!
Best,
Scott